Journal Entry
Jem's Perspective
(chapters 4-9 )
Lately Scout is being really annoying and acting like a total girl. I don't even want to hang out with her right now. I just hang out with Dill and try to ignore her so I don't get even madder. I really like hanging out with Dill we have a lot of fun playing games and talking about Boo Radley. But then Atticus got mad at us because we were playing a game that I guess was making fun of Boo Radley so we had to stop.We decided to obeyed Atticus so that we wouldn't get into anymore trouble.
We obeyed him until Dills last day in Maycomb when we decided to sneak over to the Radleys house and creep around the house a little peering in windows. It was really scary. When we were over there we saw a shadow so we started running away because we didn't want to get caught. But when we started running away we heard a shotgun go off behind us. Dill and I got really scared so we started running faster. We had to crawl under a fence to get back home and I was in such a rush they got caught on the fence and came right off. I was in too much of a hurry and scared to go back and get them so I just had to leave them there. I had to run all the way home in my underwear. It was pretty embarrassing.
When I got home I had to make up an excuse to Atticus about why I didn't have my pants. He seemed to believe it. I had found out later from Atticus that they think Mr. Radley shot a negro in his back yard. That was probably the sound we heard when we were running away from the Radleys house. Later that night I snuck out of the house to get my pants that had got caught on the fence earlier. When Scout asked about when I snuck out and got my pants I told her I found them folded and neatly hung up on the fence to freak her out a little and she was.
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ReplyDeleteI like how you were very descriptive with emotions as well as surroundings. These qualities make your journal entry fun to read. One thing to improve may be to wrap up your ending with a question or conclude a thought. Good Job :)
~Yasmeen
I really like how well you write your writing pieces and can tell that you spent effort and time in them. Once this I would probably change in your writing pieces is that you have some grammar and punctuation mistakes, but other than that, bueno!
ReplyDeleteHey, great job! I really liked how you told the events in the perspective of another character very clearly! You could of added how Jem might of felt when his pants were folded there waiting for him like making up what went through his head. Other than that, great job especially with grammar and spelling! :)
ReplyDeleteBTW, it didn't post my comment on here from two weeks ago? I commented on it May 8th! ):